It Happened To me Then
I always wanted to blog. I tried once prepared 3 blogs, but the power of almighty never allowed me to publish those. By the time it was ready a deadly virus program made its way to my hard disk drive through certain loop holes and eventually I ended up losing some of my precious articles. Now this is the second attempt.
A note to all my readers:
Don’t have high expectation with this author. To be very frank this is neither Sheldon trying to build up a nerve chilling sensational plot nor any Bhagat capable of delivering the most commercial writings. This is a simple engineering student sharing something that he wants to. The writing will have something weird fancies but this is my first writing and your comments will definitely help me to have a look @ my loopholes.
It might have happened to everyone but it happened to me then.
7th September, 2008, the evening. It was Sunday and as usual my cook was on holiday. Well to save my evening expenses I had planned a day before. I had called Anuj on Saturday evening & even talked to Ankit on a chat program.
Well @ this time I think I should let you meet two very important personality of my college life- Anuj the dominating personality who is crystal clear with his academic concepts as well as non – academics concepts. Non – academic concepts might seem a bizarre to you guys. Well I might explain it to you guys some other day. In short Anuj was my banker, someone whom I used to look up in crisis.
Well I should introduce you guys with my second asset Ankit- well this guy who is very much like a child, Sleeps on time, wakes up on time, makes his submission on time. I guess he has bribed TIME so that it stays in favour of him. But he is a real cool coder and another bundle of genius qualities. Well they are the people responsible for my in time submission.
Let’s get back to main plot. A day before Saturday, 9...9...7...0...1...2...8...7...9...2, I was constantly dialling this number on my cell phone but the airtel network in pune sucked like anything. Finally after a struggle of another 5 minutes the call got finally connected. I discussed with him the details for the dinner on Sunday night hurriedly because I had to sign in the world famous chat program Google talk. I knew Ankit would be available then because after 8:30 pm he would be back to studies. So without wasting any time I logged in and told him about the plans.
Sunday evening 7:30 pm my cell buzzed. I wasn’t able to pick up the call because I had this big thing called headphone dating my ears. One more buzz until I heard “Bastard pull out your damn headphone & pick up the call”. I recognised it was Prem’s voice. I took off the headphone and picked up the call. “Get ready by 8:00 pm” the voice on the other side said. Before I could say yes the call got disconnected. Thanks to almighty Airtel network. It sucked again as usual. I took a look at my cell phone it was 7:45. I made my calculations I had 25 minutes to take a bath and get ready before Anuj would be here. I took into account the extra 10 minutes which is the right of every Indian.
8:15 pm we three had gathered at the restaurant called as Abhishek Veg. It took us another 30 minutes before we could get a place allotted to us. By the time like common smart engineers we had a look at the chicks nearby.
You guys might be thinking why Anuj was treating us. Well as I told you before this dude had crystal clear academic concepts. This helped him to secure a 70% in the 4th semester examination. While Ankit had his favourite 69%, I was another step down @68%.
We got our place at the first floor. I liked that place because it had such a nice view. Means it was near the large glass that acted like a wall, a transparent wall.
I was keen on placing the orders first because I was damn hungry. I optically scanned the menu card before I could place a nice starters order. I did my job quite well. I was having my food and we were discussing about Mac that had made its way to Anuj’s flat the very day, when I saw a flashlight, a black flashlight which blew all my senses then and suddenly it disappeared. Well it was no street lamp, neither halogen. I quickly scanned the area but I couldn’t see her. Off in a second
It happened to me then. She was a girl, girl I hadn’t ever seen. Suddenly a stroke again and I could see her crossing the corridor area downstairs. But still I couldn’t see her face. “Dude look”, I exclaimed @ Anuj. “Where”, he asked. I sensed that my friend Anuj had missed the sight of the divine creation of GOD. The two seemed less interested in her. Well I was engrossed more in her than my food. We resumed with our main course.
15 minutes later I saw her again, she sided the light brown falling hairs on her face with her delicate fingers and turned right. I saw her face. It shone bright. It seemed that the radiance of the restaurant failed before her grace. She was beautiful. “Look”, I said to Anuj. This time he responded positively. Ankit seemed less interested. He always was dumb when it came to gals. But we never cared. The two of my asset were busier with their food. But my hunger died away. I was gazing her incessantly. Time seemed to have slowed down. The more I saw the better I felt.
She wore a black single piece, with a hint of less or no makeup. The hint of gloss was though very much evident. A beaded necklace adorned her. The black suited her best. Though the dress looked quite modern but it didn’t hinted @ any exposures. The way she carried it was fantastic. I realized then it was not the dress that you were makes u look good but the way you carry it off. She looked pure and angle. She was accompanied by her family I guess, as she had an elderly lady with her. She was talking with the lady. I was watching her still. The more I saw her happier I was @ my heart. Her moving lips when she spoke, the deformation in her facial muscle as she smiled, the delicacy of her hair, her dress every entity seemed heavenly to me. It was such a blissful state.
“C’mon are you going to finish your dinner”, a voice woke me up from my dream. “Huh!!!!’ I exclaimed @ my friends. I finished off my food, but throughout the food I had an eye @ her and another on my food. I spoke little. The only thing I could do was sighing every now and then.
She was waiting for her place. I knew how boring it was to wait for your place, because an hour before we were @ same state of time. I thought to relieve her of her stress. So I finished my food @ an unbelievable pace and asked my friends to finish off their part. I thought if I cleared my food she might get the place. I asked for bill and we strolled downstairs. I was watching her as I strolled down still lost in her dreams; I passed beside her while making our way out of the restaurant. I could get the smell of perfume, just the perfect amount which left me tantalized. I was amazed at this gr8 quality of girls. I passed by her, the intensity of my fancies was strengthened. We came out. Though my friends were planning for a desert on one side of the exit gate, I was on the other side watching that heavenly beauty. I was spell bound.
“Dude why don’t u get the bike out of the parking area? ” Anuj asked me. “Well that will help your cause she is just standing nearby the parking exit.” I thought I would bring the bike near to her and ask her “Excuse me, can u side away a bit”. I didn’t know what I was doing. Was it sensible enough? Is that a way to impress a girl? Well I dint know what was sense then because I had lost it a few moments ago. I took the key and went. I saw her delicate finger and cute silky hairs as she was siding it away from her face. I was further carried away. I thought how girls managed to have such cute delicate fingers. I looked @ mine and went in amazement. They were misshapen not worth describing here. I put in the key and with an air punched in the self start button. I loved to punch in self start button and roar the bike in first gear for quite few meters before I changed it to second and moved to more composed driver mode. That was how I used to kick off a Bajaj Pulsar. I had fancies in my mind. I wanted to hear her voice. I punched in the button again, to my surprise nothing happened...a second later I sensed my cell phone buzzing. It showed A.D calling (A.D stood for Anuj Deshmukh). I picked the call. “Beta self start kharab hai kick se start kar lo...hero mat bano...” a few roars of laughter and I knew that the bastards have made a plan to make a bakra out of me. The call got disconnected
I moved the bike out. While I came @ the entrance I saw her walking out. Perhaps she was waiting for her family who might have gone in for parking their vehicle. My plan to listen to her had failed. I took the bike out. Anuj and Ankit were jeering @ me. “So how was Excuse me plan?” I had nothing to speak. “C’mon hop in” Anuj said. But I was still watching her grace and sweet smile that she was wearing then. “C’mon man...stop now” the words broke my silence and I hopped on. Anuj raced the bike but I was still looking back forth...she became tiny & looked more with every meter we covered till her sight faded away. But her thought was still dominating in my mind.
It wasn’t that I hadn’t seen girls but I hadn’t seen anyone like her. It happens to everyone but ...
“It Happened To me Then”.
Anshu Kumar
35 comments:
Interesting Read there .. The description of the Girl has got me thinking as well .. She really must have been an angel to impress Anshu this much :) ..
A really good start as your first blog .. Could do with avoiding some spelling/grammatical mistakes from next time onwards .. But, nevertheless, it's a very very captivating read !
Keep blogging !
gr8 character n captivating plot...
anshu has class of own
Hmmm.......to be very frank i found the description of the girl quite filmy or something that has come out after reading a few books........considering it as a first attempt really commendable .............grt piece of work....kudos
well being a part of the story i have the complete right of writing the first comment. so here it goes.
well first of all let me say something about the guy who wrote this blog today. well as mentioned - i , ankit and anshu share a very unique relationship among ourselves. its gone beyond wat can be said as friendship. i connect equally with both of them but if non-studies issues are concerned i do it better with anshu i guess. maybe coz we are from the same part of the country and have a happy-go-lucky attitude & also dont hesitate to use slang words. we both are not as scheduled as soni but ya at the end we get our things done.
so i am happy that you have started blogging (even i wish to strt it one day when i ll hav my laptop at my stake nd not at ma roomies !!).
but i am angry at you for not mentioning abt that girl's sister/friend who turned up from the MARUTI 800 showing they are not out of our league*( but let me make one thing clear -- that i personally think that nobody is out of nobody's league whatever may be the parameter of comparision.) but the comment was passed by u just to make urself feel better. i hope i am correct.
so ,i too happened to fall on her but not as seriously as you did on the first one.
and oo. wait . wat happened just nw. a comment from ranjeet before mine. thats not fare. oh ya but whom i am blaming for. its my fault that i am going on writing nd writing . so let me stop here.
i sincerely wish that the girl u met(well not exactly met coz as she dosent know u at all), will meet u someday once again at a place where i wont be there so that u wont be embarrased once again. let me say it was fun watching u standing on the bike & not able to get it started and staring at us in anger. it was fun. i hope she had watched u in dat position . oh man u just made a fool out of urself.
and ya one more thing .if u really happen to meet this girl by any chance( whose probability i see to be 0.0000....1%), just ask her abt her sis/frnd for me.
k then. i ll stop now. hope i too get a comment on my blog soon.
keep blogging. keep rocking.
I havnt seen d girl u hav written in ur story.But at the ennd of it,i could imagine her with my eyes closed
@ranjeet
well ya ranjeet it had some errors..was actually excited to post it as asap so might have crept in..will try to work on this in future..
thanx for pointing out
@atit
thanks for the generosity u have shown 2 wards the writing
@ anav
thanx for the critical appreciation that u have given to me
ya the description do comes out of ur imagination and imagination builds up as u see and read...
@ anuj
well dude u were the part of the story will definitely ask for her sis/frnd if i meet her again..
thanx for ur wonderful post
hey man i must first congratulate u for ur first blog. its really xciting to read n so captivating tat i was just late for my class..
awesome dude.well done.
the description was really great!! really a good start.
keep it up!!
ye it happened to everyone in lf n dis time it hpnd to u yar...
jaise he u went to restaurant cmon swthrt...it was jst owsome yar...its was ver interesting yar...u write gud yar...kp it up...n i hope ki smday u wl dfinately meet her dnt worry....all d best
i must suggest ki nx time milein toh baat kr lena coz bhagwan kbhi kbhi aisa mauka dete hein n gv my cell num coz uknw swthrt..ha ha....
Well that was really philosophical , emotional.....!!! Really yaar , one girl and so many words, I must say anshu.....real nice blog, I can imagine how she must have enchanted you....hope u see her err I mean meet her again...waise where is dis restaurant where u guys went....luks like a nice place!!! aneways...nice blog...keep it up...me too starting to blog shortly.
didnt expect to find all this in the blog... my comments ..hmmm....most imp i hope u 2 never meet again.... nahi to tera game over.... ladki _|_ ...apart from all that ...nice way to strt a blog..and a disastrous way too ..
hmmm fabolous!! i must say :)
but let me reveal the secret.its not the 1st time such experience with this guy!! he had atleast 1 more crush or fantacies!! but expreesing it so beautifully is really great! hmmm....i wish that gal would read this!!:)
well in coming years i can say the next CHETAN BHAGAT is born here!! lolz!!!!
congrats as u finally started blogging
good start
if u were serious i bless u meet with her again soon....
keep blogging
@bauwa
hmmm..dude i will take care of ur advice man.he he he..
thanx for ur appreciation especially on that disastrous one
@kislay
dude if u can imagine the writing my job as an author is done.
@soni bhaiya
hey thanx for ur blessings bhaiya..and ya will keep u in mind if i happen to meet her
@suvi
well ton of thanx for the applaude u have given to me..Bhagat is i guess too large a tite for me to fit in..thanx for the wonderful gesture
@ankit
dude thanx for ur wishes and remarks..
Congrats for your first blog!
Nice one.
Was the story real???
Whole description leaves an impression of it being reality.
Good description of the place and girl.Bike wala part mast tha.
Very interesting & really captivating.
Hope u meet d girl again.
Go ahead for such nice blogs.
All d best.
Nice read...did u meet tht girl again?
Do keep posting regularly!!
[]-dude the waiting part is over....next time don't miss such an opportunity..nice blog..keep it coming ...and next time I want a decent try from you.;
+I thought such description(alankarik what we call in Marathi)existed only in books its pretty nice considering you are a future engg.
well i know this person right from his birth .........but i never knew he has such a drifting heart ....ideally speaking he should have followed that girl right upto her house....well aisa usne kuch bhi nahi kiya .....thats sad from my side ...now the next time when you write a blog i don't want infatuation, what i need is just simple pure passion!!!!!!!!!!!
Now abt the writing its really penned in a good way.....the experience is narrated very coherently which also take me and i swear many of the readers back to their times....though the place might not e the reastaurant....and he has also used humor in a good way don't know from where he learnt all this .......but this piece is really a marvel from anshu ......keep it up....but next time something materialistic should happen!!!!!!!!
well i know this person right from his birth .........but i never knew he has such a drifting heart ....ideally speaking he should have followed that girl right upto her house....well aisa usne kuch bhi nahi kiya .....thats sad from my side ...now the next time when you write a blog i don't want infatuation, what i need is just simple pure passion!!!!!!!!!!!
Now abt the writing its really penned in a good way.....the experience is narrated very coherently which also takes me and i swear many of the readers back to their times....though the place might not be the reastaurant....and he has also used humor in a good way don't know from where he learnt all this .......but this piece is really a marvel from anshu ......keep it up....but next time something materialistic should happen!!!!!!!!
Anshu,
The entire success of this blog lies in the fact that it makes everyone create an image of the story in their own minds otherwise what most new-time bloggers do is spill out their experiences n thoughts n knowledge on a particular subject, aand the reader finds it junk !! The story carries itself more or less smoothly and thats a safer way to start with. What I mean is that choosing a simpler story is far better and more appreciable than trying to create an excitable climax + anti-climax followed by another climax and failing disastrously ! So kudos to you for the same .
Now some one noted in their comments that the story was too "filmy" to be true .. *** I dis-agree*** The blogger never promised this to be a work of true incidents so let the reader take this as fiction if they choose to. So full points to you on the subject of ur story .. i can put it in one word .. INTRIGUING !!!!
Now lets see the problems: When I was in +2, i used to keep on learning new words from the thesaurus and never stopped myself using all those in whatever I wrote. Now coming out of bgp to a more used-to-english environment, I realised that all it does is that it makes the sentences heavier and this is certainly not desirable . So now I try to be simpler.
So there are some sentences which use the same words over and over again and that makes the content heavier. Lets avoid it !
" Well I should introduce you guys with my second asset Ankit- well this guy who is very much like a child" . . now u see one of these "well" shd certainly be avoided ..
Next, some words are rather inappropriatey used and one infact in the opening sentence itself !!
" It might have happened to everyone but it happened to me then" ... a better choice would have "anyone" vs "everyone" and probably "might" could have been replaced with a "may" or "could" .. please dont feel I m being nasty to you ... these are the things which struck me while reading it and I am just giving you my honest opinion .
" Well @ this time I think I should let you meet two very important personality of my college life- Anuj the dominating personality who is crystal clear with his academic concepts as well as non – academics concepts. Non – academic concepts might seem a bizarre to you guys. " ... again some wrongly put words ... u do`nt have personalities in ur life rather u have people ! the second time "non-academic concepts" could have been replaced by "the latter" ///// the reason is that usage of similar words or phrases in a close space does`nt leave space for breathing !!!
" the call got connected/the call got dis-connected' ... "got" could have been avoided.
and i am really unsure what u mean by a black flashlight ???
"Anuj raced the bike but I was still looking back forth..." .. what does back forth mean ?????
Please dont feel that I was too harsh .. I am stressing it again !!! The idea of ur blog is communicated thro` well .. u just need to take care of these !!
And, I felt good being asked my opinion abt it .... thanx buddy !! ---- Sorry for being a li`l late on it ! ----
Deepak.
DUDE....was that girl for real! good to see u interested in girls after all n even better was your blog.......i won't say it was good for a first timer bc's u wrote like a pro
DUDE....was that girl for real! good to see u interested in girls after all n even better was your blog.......i won't say it was good for a first timer bc's u wrote like a pro
A good start in deed. Anshu good blog i would say.
But was this story a real one or just an imagination. If it's ur imagination then dude you should take some interest in writing as well. What say? Give a try man.
N do read my critical gaming blogs at omegagamer.blogspot.com.
A real nice blog to start wid!!
Vry interesting & captivating...
I could actually visualise d whole sequence of things happenin while goin through it..
The story is quite intriguing..n its really difficult leavin it halfway once u get started..
Nd yup..ur writin style sumwhr reminds me of chetan bhagat..
Congratulations!!Keep up d good wrk!! nd i hope u meet the grl again nd dat too vry soon..!!
Was quite intersting piece of work done by u dude. story really engrossed me. the features jotted down by u of the girl is really obsessive.
gd job man.....
congrats man for ur first blog..the blog u have written is quite interesting to read there....the description of girl done by u is quite impressive.next time don"t miss it man....great character used and so captivating....keep blogging!!!
hey anshu...
frankly speakin,.... as i strtd up vid ur blog... i got 2 knw it wud b ol bout a "GIRL"....
wel... gud wrk... dscptn was smpl n natural...
hope u get a gurl lyk tis... :P..u guyz do hav gud imaginations... hmmm...
do cum vd sm odr topics also..
kp bloggin...:D...
welcome to the world of blogging dude.Fundo post, lage raho ;)
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hmmm.. really captivating start.. mast potray... yaar pahle kabhi bataya nahi uske baare mein.. saale ab to party honi chaiye.... good blog.. keep up
to accept the truth .... pichli bar maine tumhara post utna seriously nahi padha tha.. don't mind......but this time i have done justice to ur blog..it was good again. lekin u could have kept it a bit short...
like instead of writing ..."This was sequentially the fourth time I flashed up my cell phone for Time since last 15 minutes"...u culd have done with.. "checked my cell again..4th time in 15 minutes"....ya somethig simpler..what i mean is just keep things simple ..dont go for big words.
wahin par likha hai "Sometimes something goes so slow"...i dont think it's rit to call time something.
n most important ..about that no...i think u better not have put it there.
waise.. what i liked was that u r truthfully admiting ur feelings.........keep blogging
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